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<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff
size=2>Greetings, </FONT></SPAN></DIV>
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size=2></FONT></SPAN> </DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2>This
is a very ambitious undertaking, and you are to be congratulated. I'm
intrigued by your use of a rhymed stanzaic form rather than an alliterative one,
given your use of the language. I do see a shift toward the
older alliterative form, in your translation, in the final verse.
<P class=MsoNormal style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align=center><SPAN
style="mso-ansi-language: EN-GB"><FONT color=#000000>Þam hild hebbaned hits
unfæger heafod,<o:p></o:p></FONT></SPAN></P>Could you elaborate on the choice of
verse form? And whether the line I quoted indicates a shift in viewpoint
from the French romance back toward the Anglo-Saxon warrior tradition?
(Arthur turns from personal despair to his public role as war leader.) Or
am I reading too much into this?</FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff
size=2></FONT></SPAN> </DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2>I
might suggest that you use an earlier form of the name Guinevere in your
Anglo-Saxon translation. I recall that she was named Gaynor in the
Stanzaic Morte Arthur </FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2><A
href="http://www.lib.rochester.edu/CAMELOT/TEAMS/stnzfrm3.htm">http://www.lib.rochester.edu/CAMELOT/TEAMS/stnzfrm3.htm</A></FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2>and
Gaynor or Waynor in the Alliterative</FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2><A
href="http://www.lib.rochester.edu/CAMELOT/TEAMS/allitfrm.htm">http://www.lib.rochester.edu/CAMELOT/TEAMS/allitfrm.htm</A></FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2>which,
of course, are later than the Anglo-Saxon version you're working toward
here, but closer timewise than Malory. </FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff
size=2></FONT></SPAN> </DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2>Afraid
my Old English texts are packed at present, so I can't comment on the
translation itself at present. It is of note, however, that the earliest
versions of the Arthuriad do not include the Guinevere-Lancelot-Arthur triangle,
which makes your use of the Old English even more noteworthy in this
context.</FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff
size=2>Vivien</FONT></SPAN></DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT face=Arial color=#0000ff
size=2></FONT></SPAN> </DIV>
<DIV><SPAN class=072150817-17032004></SPAN><FONT face=Tahoma
size=2>-----Original Message-----<BR><B>From:</B> minstrel-admin@pbm.com
[mailto:minstrel-admin@pbm.com]<B>On Behalf Of </B>Averil White<BR><B>Sent:</B>
Tuesday, March 16, 2004 10:01 PM<BR><B>To:</B>
minstrel@pbm.com<BR><B>Subject:</B> minstrel: My first SCA
poem...<BR><BR></DIV></FONT>
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<DIV>And my first minstrel post!</DIV>
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<DIV>I apologise ... the Old English isn't quite right, but I've only just
started learning it.</DIV>
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<P class=MsoNormal style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align=center><B><I><SPAN
style="mso-ansi-language: EN-GB">Ballad of King Arthur and Sir
Lancelot.<o:p></o:p></SPAN></I></B></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align=center><SPAN
style="mso-ansi-language: EN-GB">Gledd of Frea Arthur ond Leof
Lancelot.<o:p></o:p></SPAN></P>
<P class=MsoNormal style="TEXT-ALIGN: center" align=center><SPAN
style="mso-ansi-language: EN-GB"> <SPAN class=072150817-17032004><FONT
face=Arial color=#0000ff size=2>(trimmed for
brevity)</FONT></SPAN></SPAN></P></DIV></BLOCKQUOTE></BODY></HTML>